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Incorporating peer feedback in writing instruction: examining its effects on Chinese English-as-a-foreign-language (EFL) learners’ writing performance

  • Zhiqing Xu ORCID logo , Lawrence Jun Zhang ORCID logo EMAIL logo and Judy M. Parr ORCID logo
Published/Copyright: February 9, 2022

Abstract

Peer feedback has been widely employed in writing instruction in various contexts. However, studies into its effects on improving students’ writing performance, particularly its long-term effects, are under-represented. To fill the research gap, we adopted a pre-, post-, and delayed post-test quasi-experimental design to investigate the long-term effects of a peer feedback intervention. Two intact classes of EFL students from a Chinese university were recruited, with one class participating in peer feedback activities and the other class receiving collective feedback from their teacher for one semester. Their compositions for the pre-, post-, delayed post-tests were compared in terms of the overall text quality, content, organization, complexity, accuracy, and fluency (CAF). The results show that the experimental group participants made significant improvements in the overall text quality, content, organization, and accuracy in the post-test and they retained the improvements 12 weeks after the intervention. In addition, they outperformed their counterparts receiving collective feedback in the overall text quality and organization in the post- and delayed post-tests, and in accuracy only in the delayed post-test. Results suggest that peer feedback could help Chinese EFL learners make progress in writing.


Corresponding author: Lawrence Jun Zhang, School of Curriculum and Pedagogy, Faculty of Education and Social Work, The University of Auckland, 74 Epsom Avenue, 1023, Auckland, New Zealand, E-mail:

Funding source: Philosophy and Social Sciences Research Grant from Jilin University

Award Identifier / Grant number: No. 2018QY009

Funding source: Joint Research Grant from Jilin University and Daren Technology

Award Identifier / Grant number: No. 371219541434

  1. Research funding: This was supported by Philosophy and Social Sciences Research Grant from Jilin University, Grant No. 2018QY009 and Joint Research Grant from Jilin University and Daren Technology, Grant No. 371219541434.

Appendix A: Topics for the pre-, post-, and delayed post-tests

(Pre-test)

Directions: Suppose you have two options upon graduation: one is to take a job in a company and the other to go to a graduate school. You are to make a choice between the two. Write an essay to explain the reasons for your choice. You should write at least 200 words within the 45 min.

(Post-test)

Directions: Suppose you have two options upon graduation: one is to find a job somewhere and the other to start a business of your own. You are to make a decision. Write an essay to explain the reasons for your decision. You should write at least 200 words within the 45 min.

(Delayed post-test)

Directions: Suppose you have two options upon graduation: one is to work in a state-owned business and the other in a joint venture. You are to make a choice between the two. Write an essay to explain the reasons for your choice. You should write at least 200 words within the 45 min.

Appendix B: Peer feedback form for writing task 6

Draft written by___________ Draft reviewed by__________ Date__________

General guidelines

Before providing feedback for your partner, make sure you read the information about cohesion. Then you are required to read and comment on your partner’s draft guided by the questions. As a final step, you are required to FILL IN THE FORM. Meanwhile, you can also give in-text comments and/or end-of-the text comments.

When you provide feedback for your partner, please bear in mind the following two points: Firstly, keep your feedback specific and constructive: You should not only point out the problems, but also offer clear advice on how to fix them. Secondly, be honest and friendly with your partner. The purpose of peer feedback is to help each other improve the draft.

Cohesion and cohesive devices[1]

Creating cohesion means ‘tying’ our words, phrases, sentences and paragraphs together, to create a text where the relationships between these elements is clear and logical to the reader, giving the text ‘flow’. We create cohesion at all these levels (word, phrase, sentence and paragraph), in order to direct our readers’ attention to the development of our argument. Following are some of the cohesive devices (as shown in bold) you can make use of.

Repetition: Use a particular word or phrase across different sentences or paragraphs.

Example: Where does the designer get ideas and inspiration for new fashions? The fashion designer gets ideas and inspiration everywhere! Through television the designer experiences all the wonders of the entertainment world. In films the designer is exposed to the influences of all the arts and lifestyles throughout the world. Museum exhibits, art shows, world happenings, expositions, the theater, music, dance, and world travel are all sources of design inspiration to the fashion designer.

Synonyms: Use a word or phrase in a later sentence which has the same or similar meaning to a keyword in the first sentence.

Example: Excesses of fat beyond the body’s usual requirements become the storage fat that builds up as adipose or fatty tissue in many parts of the body. This is the type of fat that forms layers between the muscles and the skin and over the internal organs and other vital parts. These cushions do have some protective value, but this storage fat also contributes to obesity.

Pronouns: Use a pronoun to refer back to a phrase already used.

Example: When scientific experiments do not work out as expected, they are often considered failures until some other scientist tries them again. Those that work out better the second time around are the ones that promise the most rewards.

Transition words/expressions:

Adding similar ideas: “in addition…”, “another reason is…”, and “equally…”
Contrasting ideas: “in contrast…”, “on the other hand…”, and “on the contrary…”, and “although…”
Giving examples or evidence: “for example…”, “for instance…”, and “to illustrate this…”
Explaining results: “as a result…”, “for this reason…”, and “consequently…”
Sequencing: “firstly…”, “secondly…”, “next…”, and “to begin with…”
Providing explanations: “owing to…”, “because of…”, and “due to…”
Drawing conclusions: “in conclusion…” and “to sum up…”
Introducing your opinion: “in my opinion…”, “to my mind…”, and “it seems to me that …”

Important tips: Don’t over-use transition words or phrases, because you may confuse or irritate your readers. Show variety in cohesive devices.

Guiding questions for provision of feedback

  1. What are some strengths in this composition? Please list AT LEAST ONE strength and illustrate with examples from the composition.

  2. Feedback on cohesion

    1. List AT LEAST TWO transition devices used in this composition and comment on this use?

    2. Other questions to consider: What cohesive devices are used in this composition? Are they varied? What other devices can be used in this composition? Do the transition words/expressions in this composition help you understand the logic of the ideas? Comment on inappropriately-used transition words/expressions and make suggestions.

  3. Feedback on other aspects.

(You are not required to provide feedback on every aspects listed below, but you are required to generate a total of AT LEAST EIGHT pieces of feedback)

  1. Introductory paragraph: Is there a thesis statement in the introductory paragraph? Is the thesis statement congruent with the directions and well-developed through body paragraphs? Is the introductory paragraph appropriate in length?

  2. Body paragraphs: Is there a topic sentence within each body paragraph? Is the topic sentence in each body paragraph well-supported? Is any part within the paragraph not related to the topic sentence, or any part within the paragraph not logically ordered? Is each body paragraph appropriate in length?

  3. Concluding paragraph: Is there a conclusion in the composition? Does it echo to the thesis statement? Is the concluding paragraph appropriate in length?

  4. Clarity in content: Is any part of the composition confusing?

  5. Language use: What are some language problems in this composition?

  6. What are other problems in this composition?

Note. The definitions of cohesion and cohesive devices are quoted from http://www.writingcentre.uct.ac.za/sites/default/files/image_tool/images/167/Cohesion.pdf.

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Received: 2021-04-13
Accepted: 2022-01-24
Published Online: 2022-02-09
Published in Print: 2023-11-27

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